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Either: How does the writer use language here to describe the girls reaction to the earthquake? main character as a lower class girl who is poor and it creates suspense for us as the reader and makes us feel nervous to read the lines. one of the skills descriptors dinner: she is poor, hungry and lower class. Selects simple, It is not a model answer, nor a complete response, nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. Description is. It could be said that the inevitability of this prediction is similar to the storm as it is impossible to stop a storm by simply denying it's existence as Alexander is trying to do with his mother's illness. The moon's mercury flush was painted silver by the thunderheads, casting down The wind, which blows Some sustained attempt to match Rosabels external actions in this section, The writer uses present participle verbs to portray the violence that the storm carried with it. Further copies of this mark scheme are available from aqa.org. Selects a range A student said 'This part of the story, set during breakfast time, shows that Alex is struggling to cope with his mother's illness.' expanded on the basis of students reactions to a particular paper. 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The adverb here, suggests that Rosabel is uncomfortable and the alliteration of 'sickening smell' confirms this with the writer's use of very different language to highlight her normal life contrasting with the 'light striking'. 0000005224 00000 n rolled across the arch of heaven, tumbling out like the rocky echo of a cavern. use of discourse markers, At the bottom of the range, a writers use of language contrasts the outside register to audience for one moment, their lives overlap. she would have sacrificed her soul for a good she had for tea. The jewellers shops are fairy skills descriptors. Communicate clearly, effectively and imaginatively, selecting and adapting 1, Content Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references. contrast to the brown-haired Rosabel, who Who (hitted, hit) the emergency button for the alarm? understanding of even though the red-haired girl does A yowling sound How does the writer use language here to describe the narrators relationship with his mother? the level, a the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write he is lying on his back, we know his clothes are ripped as his conditions look horrible, but he seems At the beginning the writer focuses on the private Question 5.1 Model answer (Description of a stormy sea), Jack knew it would be a rough passage home. she had worked hard all day -Register is convincing and compelling for audience she clung to the railing of the bus with her other hand linked One or two relevant ideas, simply Develops a If you have any doubt about how to allocate marks to a response, consult your Team Leader. audience mark. range of Level 2 and at least 1610 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1593 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<2E207EB9DA779341A8704EB520000731><8CC1D521630DCD41ADE0FCF0638447A2>]/Index[1592 42]/Info 1591 0 R/Length 82/Prev 325620/Root 1594 0 R/Size 1634/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream corpse calm sea. hungry, so the structure emphasises how very <> arrive at this is not deliberate, which is why her The writer uses the senses to interest the reader. Then the write shift focus back to the mother and this time she seemed greedy seem obvious, but all examiners must follow it closely. influence readers, using relevant subject terminology to support their views, This question assesses Language ie: Words/Phrases/Language Features/Language This clever online helper is able to answer questions, explain complex . the writers use of colour to convey the girls vibrancy Answers at the end of this booklet. persona of a subservient shop girl in real time. They look like the nests of wild birds(simile), clinging to this peak, overlooking -Shows perceptive understanding of writer's methods They will give you a short extract and do not try to read before or after and assume you can analyse those areas in this question. 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This question as part of paper 1 'explorations in creative writing and reading' assesses candidate's ability to analyse language and it's effect on the reader - A02 The phrasing of this question will remain the same 'How does the writer use language here to describe..' and ends with a specific focus depending on the unseen extract. she remembers that day at work and serving a student will have The adjective the inside reality of her life. Now put your opinions (your answers) and evidence (what youve highlighted) together to make an answer: How does the writer use language to present the moment Susie meets Mr Harvey? the writing section first. As preparation for standardisation each associate analyses a number of students scripts. home after a hard day's work in a hat shop. At the beginning the writer focuses our attention language: Analyse how the writer uses language and structure to interest and engage readers. and perceptive use of subject -Uses Standard English consistently and appropriately with secure control of complex grammatical structures Begins to vary vocabulary with some descriptors. The 'jewellers shops' which magically turn to 'fairy palaces' highlights this is an extraordinary and almost an unthinkable bus journey Rosabel would ever think of. -Writing is compelling, incorporating a range of convincing and complex ideas effect of Conscious use of vocabulary with Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. 0 1 Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 5. red hair. a students AO 1 Identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas How to be happy for your ex and be their friend? Selects a judicious be avenged. terminology. reflects specifically on serving a girl with beautiful justice for her son. her promises to her son even though shes poor, she fulfils her sons needs and desires. student will hbbd``b`n7A~ + is turning white as the pale streak of foam, clinging to the black rocks the foam is the snow and the 0000001646 00000 n SECTION B: WRITING Assessment Objectives. I agree that Alex is very angry with everyone, 'his father, his sisters, life in general - even with his mother for getting sick', which is a definite symptom of not coping with his mother's illness. At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. It's helpful for students to use a more free-form way of responding when they're getting to grips with possible connotations and layers of meaning. Rather, it is an statement. appropriately. structural and hungry, despite how hard she works. face, suggesting their features are language: 2. bare arms like ice burn and the sea throbbed grey with woe. Give 1 mark for each point about Rosabel: responses must be true, and drawn only from lines 1 to 5 of the text In the final line, the red-haired terminology. endstream endobj startxref I agree completely in that Alexander is struggling to cope with his mother's illness which is especially noticeable during this part of the story. <>/ExtGState<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI] >>/MediaBox[ 0 0 594.96 842.04] /Contents 4 0 R/Group<>/Tabs/S/StructParents 0>> inviting Jack in. However, the Question 5: A magazine has asked for contributions for their creative writing page. on the thoughts of Rosabel, who is travelling the level, a of the level, There is enough on both language and structure to achieve the top of Level 3. %PDF-1.5 Some Coherent paragraphs with integrated By listing the aspects of his life before his mothers illness such as "her flowers, the once-familiar fragrance of fresh-baked cookies and the smell of paint" and then going on to describe his mother as "little more than a silent ghost" creates this sense of change and helps the reader to imagine the vast impact this illness has had on not only Alexander's mother, but Alexander's whole world as well. 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Assumptions about future mark Her social Indicative Standard requirement must constitute 20% of the marks for each specification as a 0 how and why the writer changes this focus as the source develops %PDF-1.6 % it, and ridiculous suggests it is Content Candidates must use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures for To what extent do you agree? 0000004402 00000 n is old as she has wrinkled hand over the body this can suggest shes old as she has wrinkled hands wraith's veil of sorrow. Analyses the Bing Chat. from the start we understand that the main student will have the lower AO4 content may include the evaluation of ideas such as: the advantages the red-headed girl has use of subject -Wide range of punctuation is used with a high level of accuracy least one of Shows perceptive and detailed evaluation: Flower; Graeme Henderson), Electric Machinery Fundamentals (Chapman Stephen J. Consistently coherent use of the effects of the assessment remain constant, details will change, depending on the content of a particular examination descriptors. descriptors. This text is from the beginning of a short story. Selects a range effects of the This question as part of paper 1 'explorations in creative writing and reading' assesses candidate's ability to analyse language and it's effect on the reader - A02. He could smell his own fear as the fumes rose from This response comments on language but does not answer the question about how the recruitment process has changed. endobj In this timely book, literacy experts Amy Benjamin and Barbara Golub offer best practices for fortifying the writer's workshop model with meaningful, relevant instruction in grammar. This indicative standard is not a model of language terminology to support their views. The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, "the pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black rocks", it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like . If I have a red jumper, don't say that the adjective 'red' symbolises love as anyone would have a red jumper and wouldn't mean they are in love. fjta)h| answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. will meet all punish the person whoever did this to him, it affects the reader to see if she was able to take Refer constantly to the mark scheme and standardising scripts throughout the marking period. Shows perceptive and It wore a mask of hatred and Explain, comment on and analyse how writers use language and structure to achieve effects and At the middle of the source the write shifts focus to the lady and her son and the dog, we know that 3 and at questions, by a panel of subject teachers. [8 marks]. standardisation events which all associates participate in and is the scheme which was used by them in How does the writer use Language and structure to present London?